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The Ocean is a place of secrets,
Enveloping your possessions in with a seal.
It doesn’t know what you drop-
Just eats it all up
Laying at its feet,
Worn boots and putrid fish
And old men’s business suits

It holds the key to finding that odd sock and your car keys
It’s dark with its ways of burglary it doesn’t knock at your door.
It ‘politely’ comes through your toilet and sink
And that glass of water you didn’t drink.

It is your unmade bed that you forgot to clean
With its pillow of rocks, sheet of waves
As boats sleep on it and crumple the cover
And sea life frolics with its lover

Ocean the lucky dip of life
Reach down and collect your prize
Explore it and find the unknown
Put your ear to the cold water, hear the whales drone
©2006-2009 =lady-shirakawa
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A poem i wrote for a competition at #:devthelaststanza: I Came 2nd :faint:.

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Given 2007-09-19

The Ocean by =lady-shirakawa is a playful meditation on the ocean. (Suggested by `WineWriter and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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:iconhappyone52000:
i like it a lot... keep it up... i don't have much more to say other than :fav+:

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The sanest people in this world are in the assilums: you have to be a little crazy to survive out in this crazy world.
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i love this hunny :glomp:
:iconmathaisgo:
good one :)

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:iconrailzombie:
I love the imagery, it's just beautiful :drool: I don't find it humorous though... heh.

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^^ Pardon this guy... he's not too good at interacting with other people.
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It's a nice metaphor on how an ocean affects so many facets of one's life. Well written; keep writing

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